Dedication
You took my heart – tossed it aside
Wore me down – took me as your bride
Looked down at me with your lofty airs
Sent me into a world of despair
You took my heart – tore it in two
Stomped on it with your oversized shoe
Told me I’m stupid – deserved that shit
Turned me on to drugs – then dared me to quit
You took my heart – threw it away
Tossed it aside – left it to decay
Beat me down both inside and out
About my worthiness left me to doubt
You took my heart – I loved you despite
The hell you put me through every night
You took my heart – I’m taking it back
You took my heart – I’m. Taking. It. Back!
graphic from this site.
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Dedicated to the 48% Alaskan women.
This week’s Trifecta Writing challenge is to write 33-333 words on DECAY.
Posted: May 28th, 2012 under Alaska, Moose Nuggets, sad, trifecta, words.
Comments: 13
Comments
Comment from Tamyka
Time: May 28, 2012, 4:23 pm
Thank you for providing the context through your dedication. Those statistics are horrible. This is definitely written from a defiant place beyond despair, and it resonates with hope and strength. I like it.
Comment from Renada Styles
Time: May 28, 2012, 5:12 pm
the rhythm was perfect and the rhyming marvelous (i’m terrible at rhyming, so definite props!) the tone, though describing a hurtful circumstance, let the reader know the end would be one of strength, for these words are strong!
i particularly liked the following lines; i believe them to capture the ‘heart’ of this poem:
“You took my heart – threw it away
Tossed it aside – left it to decay”
Comment from FKC
Time: May 29, 2012, 12:05 am
Your light shines so brightly.
Comment from The Gal Herself
Time: May 29, 2012, 4:29 am
48% is completely *unacceptable!* Your rage comes through with each syllable, as does your admiration.
Comment from kgwaite
Time: May 29, 2012, 3:02 pm
48??? Horrible. I feel the anger and the frustration and, yes, that sweet determination.
Comment from justkeepinitrealfolks
Time: May 29, 2012, 4:39 pm
Very powerful poem and that statistic is truly horrifying.
Comment from sandra Tyler
Time: May 29, 2012, 7:44 pm
Like the way this comes back around. Ends up feisty rather than sentimental!
Comment from Gina
Time: May 30, 2012, 9:37 am
Dude…rotten to the core. I have a friend who experienced mental and physical abuse and she got her “feisty” on with the same attitude you portray at the end. Fantastic!
Comment from Tara R.
Time: May 30, 2012, 10:50 am
A wonderfully strong, empowering ending. I wish more stories like this had that ending.
Comment from JannaT
Time: May 30, 2012, 5:11 pm
I like that she’s not gonna take it any more. When I was sixteen, I worked with a woman who needed to chant and believe these words. I was shocked at how her husband berated her in front of all of us.
Comment from Aidan Donnelley Rowley
Time: May 31, 2012, 6:41 am
A powerful musing on possession. Great.
Comment from Trifecta
Time: May 31, 2012, 11:09 pm
Thanks for linking up this week. The statistics there are, indeed, staggering. So sad. I liked your line about how he took her as a bride. The phrase is usually used in a positive sense, but here it’s impossible to miss the idea of possession behind it. Nice job.
Comment from Annabelle
Time: May 28, 2012, 4:13 pm
That’s an anthem worth reading! You did a great job maintaining a defiant tone even when chronicling the crap, which is hard to do.