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Is this thing on? I always worry that I’ve forgotten something.

It’s hard for me to tell you these things, Susie, but now it’s time. I’m not your dad.

Your dad is . . . shoot!
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33 words! That’s the weekend challenge from trifecta’s wordy editors – write 33 words (only!) in 1st person narrative. Phew!

30 responses

  1. Katie says:

    Oops, technology can suck sometimes.

  2. Atreyee says:

    Oh no!What a bummer!Now Susie will be biting her nails in suspense!Loved this Barbara!:-)

    I know exactly how agonizing technology gets at times-my hubby gets exasperated with my, what I call ,”technical disability”-he is an engineer & a total tech guy-ugh!

  3. Valerie says:

    So typical of technology! Just when you really need it, it malfunctions!
    This was fun!

  4. yerpirate says:

    Oh dear!! Very good!

  5. I hate when that happens! Jeez, this is getting really weird.

  6. Cobbie's World says:

    I’m not the dad, that’s all I know. Beyond that………all bets are off.
    Lovely take on the prompt, Barbara. 🙂

  7. Kimberly says:

    Love how you left us hanging! Clever 🙂

  8. Debbie says:

    Dang! Technology hiccups right when we believe what we’ve created was perfect. Never seem to get it the same.

  9. Rambly says:

    Oh what a clever piece leaving us hanging… – the unknown – well done!

  10. joetwo says:

    The one time you want something to work!

  11. Sammy Davies says:

    Your use of shoot is a bit like a 3rd definition!

  12. Draug419 says:

    This sort of stuff always happens at the worst times, it seems.

  13. Lumdog says:

    Oh wow! Moving and humorous take.

  14. Barry Wright says:

    Boy! That rings so true! At my son’s place, he has 5 remotes each designed to do something different when you turn on the T.V. Dah! Well done! Memories are made of this :))

  15. Gah! Where is the rest of this story??
    haha, you definently snagged me with those 33 words!

  16. Awww man. Now if they tape broke, that would be just awful! Good one.

  17. Suzanne says:

    What an ending! Don’t leave us hanging. This is a great take on the prompt Barbara – well done!

  18. ann bennett says:

    whoops, It makes me thinkabout cranking a car engine thats already running. You’ll find out soon. lol Good work!

  19. Tina says:

    I remember those tape recorder days! My dad even used to have a reel to reel. I love how you build up the tension for the reveal, then throw us a cliffhanger. Great job!

  20. viv blake says:

    Bravo, Barbara. I love your take on the technology. I get all dithery when I have to leave a message on a phone, so I understand completely.

  21. Sounds very familiar….Diane

  22. Nicely done, Barbara!

  23. Tara R. says:

    What a time for the tape to mess up. Intriguing.

  24. MissM says:

    Poor Susie. Now without a father! Nice job.

  25. Teala says:

    Technology is such a hassle sometimes.

  26. I love this blog… a clever 33 words…xx

  27. Bjorn says:

    Ha, yes darn technology it really sucks 🙂

  28. Stacey says:

    Wait…who is her Dad?!? Poor girl. Great job!

  29. Rog Rites (@RogRites) says:

    lol

  30. Bad timing. Just like when a shockwave crashes or power cuts down before we have saved the drafts while writing a blog. Bummer!

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