The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction. She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.
She was 3 when she’d come to this house: too small to be noticed. Easy to ignore. The years since had been lackluster, joyless. Susan sighed. Today was her 16th birthday. Nobody remembered.
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Trifecta’s weekend challenge was to add 33 words to the judges’ proffered 33 words . . . moving the story along. The italicised words are Trifecta’s.
Flowed beautifully. Nice entry.
Awww. I hope a surprise party is right around the corner for Susan 😉
Brings the movie 16 Candles to mind. I love that movie. Well done.
Someone surely will notice. I’m with Kenya…surprise party! And I loved 16 Candles too!
everyone gets noticed eventually
Oh, so sad. Very nicely done. I like the refrain: too small to be noticed.
Loneliness. You captured it very well. An outsider wanting to fit in, but unnoticed. Nice.
I like the idea of a surprise party. If you had 33 more words, could you make that happen? 🙂
I feel her pain. Nice piece!
I want to cry
N icew take on the prompt!
I wonder if she needs to shake things up a bit. Nice take.
Where’s the “Like” button?
Great take on the prompt. Neglected, an outsider, a birthday girl wishing for more. Great writing 🙂
So many emotions packed into 33 words!
I love the depth.
So sad. Its even sadder knowing that this actually happens. Well written.
This was great 😀 You communicated all the emotions of the neglected character, Susan so well 🙂
Youch. I am completely heartbroken for this imaginary kid.
I was drawn to yours because you write so well and I have an angsty teenage daughter.
excellent work and congratulations on the silver medal at the trifecta olympics
Congrats!!! Haven’t been playing regularly so I missed this earlier.