The girl knelt at Mother Mary’s feet, tears streaming down her face. Sister Magdalena bent next to her offering a slim taper. “You must light a candle for your father, Raisa. Tell Mother Mary your Intention for your father’s soul. Come now, child.”

Raisa rose from her knees, took the taper and walked to the votive stand. There she stood, rigid in her defiance. “My intention? My intention, Sister, is to see his rotten soul burn in the fiery pits of hell!”

Heedless of Magdalena’s gasp, Raisa threw the taper down, turned on her heel and walked out of the church that had harbored a sinful man and had helped to steal her innocence by turning its back when she cried for help.
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Trifecta’s challenge this week is to write 33-333 words on INTENTION using the third definition:
3a : what one intends to do or bring about
b : the object for which a prayer, mass, or pious act is offered

The above is fiction . . . I do sort of like that it turned out to be 123 words. The symmetry makes me smile.

12 responses

  1. Atreyee says:

    What a cool story & so well done Barbara!I liked her defiance & the courage she finally gathered to express her anguish,hate & all that had been killing her inside.Am hoping this comment will show up-am not sure what I must add in the field “website”-I do not have one-so just adding my blog url:-)

  2. Atreyee says:

    Yay-successful!I can see my comment:-)

  3. Gina says:

    So tragic is the story behind the story. You nailed her defiance to Sister Magdalena and the church, for that matter. I wonder if it burnt down?

  4. Tom MacInnes says:

    Wow! Powerful story! Good for her for standing up for herself when others wouldn’t. That takes a lot of courage.

  5. Jennifer says:

    Good for Raisa, that steel in her spine will keep her strong.

  6. Draug419 says:

    Love the defiance!

  7. i sincerely love what you’ve done with the story, especially given the piece I wrote, where I took religion to a different place.

  8. lumdog says:

    Wow! This is powerful writing and a compelling story. You packed a lot in those 123 words.

  9. steph says:

    Love the 123 words. A perfect number for a perfect, compact story. It’s all there!

  10. Tara R. says:

    YES! A perfect way to break the silence of abuse, good for Raisa.

  11. FKC says:

    So powerful and simple.

  12. JannaTWrites says:

    Whoa! Good for her for standing up and speaking her mind.

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